Interesting way to change up such a dark and despairing story into one of hope and possible redemption. I was also interested in how you changed Xander's inability to be noticed from the original story into one which severely limited his interaction with the world. That small change served to heighten the feeling of isolation and emphasize how important a part of his new life Marcie would be. It also made Xander's rapid response to Faith's offer more real.
This Marcie is far more attached to Xander than the Marcie in the original story so that may be why I found her instant agreement to accompany him a bit jarring. I would have expected her to make him work for it, at least.
The interdependence of Marcie and Xander was very interesting and nicely conceived.
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Date: 2015-06-25 02:50 am (UTC)This Marcie is far more attached to Xander than the Marcie in the original story so that may be why I found her instant agreement to accompany him a bit jarring. I would have expected her to make him work for it, at least.
The interdependence of Marcie and Xander was very interesting and nicely conceived.